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Only thirteen,
so is she,
pretty as a flower,
a flame burning free.

Only thirteen,
but she is not,
sweet as candy,
She's sticky and I'm caught.

A choice to make,
and difficult too.
Settle for what's easy,
or fight for love so true?

On top of that there's her.
She's different and dark,
with a soul of ice,
and teeth like a shark.

Who will be mine?
The one of fire,
so beautiful and free,
awakening desire?

Or will it be her,
candy so sweet,
and knowledge so vast,
makes my heart beat fast.

Maybe the dark one,
with the adventure of her own,
but she's cold and guarded,
loves never been shown.

Maybe it won't be any,
forever me and Jake,
in love with only adventure,
all other love was fake.
O lord, before anyone goes and notes me, i realize that I broke the rhyme scheme in one of the stanzas. It's purposeful. Adventure Time doesn't follow the rules and neither does my poem =P obviously the three girls I'm referring to are Flame Princess, Bubblegum Princess, and Marcelene. I know there hasn't een a lot of tension between finn and marcy, but I'm still hopeful.
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:iconashe-wakefield:
Nice one! Love Adventure Time and this, it reads so well!
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lostmyslef Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks again!
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Blue-eyed-girl-23 Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! it's perfect!!! O_O
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lostmyslef Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol, glad you think so =)
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Blue-eyed-girl-23 Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D
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kmbrother Mar 25, 2013  Student Writer
You capture the essence of the three girls and how the way they entangled Finn's heart so well. This is just excellent, no doubt about it.
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lostmyslef Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much!
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:iconpupkim-project:
"Awesome" is too light of a word to express this poem. "Algebraic" comes to mind.
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lostmyslef Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are algebraic.
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SportyArtist Mar 24, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is amazing!
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