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I'm tearing them down,
Piece by piece.
Let the walls fall,
Let the pain increase.

I stare my pain in the face,
Let it rip me a part.
Show what I've always feared,
In the depths of my cold heart.

I review my lack of care,
All the people that I've hurt.
When did I become so cold?
When did loved ones turn to dirt?

What happened to me?
Once so loving and kind.
When did it get so bad?
Did I suddenly lose my mind?

I want to trust again,
To love and to care,
But is the risk to high?
Is the cost of pain fair?

I realize that it's not.
I'm safe within my walls.
So much better to be cold,
Then to get hurt in the fall.
About me, and my cold heart.....
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:iconvietnamcouples214:
Vietnamcouples214 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student Artist
This is me..
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry
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AsukaChitrO Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
I really appreciate this one. keep up!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Being cold hearted is a survival mechanism in various situations. And it works.
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:iconasukachitro:
AsukaChitrO Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Ya true, but u hardly live. U just go on.
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I hardly live for others but I live hard when I'm alone.
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:iconasukachitro:
AsukaChitrO Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
Hmmmm. I just wanna say, no offence to ur way of living or what u believe at all.
I just said based on what I experiance. No hard feelings plz...:)
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
It's OK. We simply have different perspectives.
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:iconasukachitro:
AsukaChitrO Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013
right
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very true
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:iconmagicaljoey:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   Writer
Sometimes it's safer to be behind the walls, but life would be better if we took the risk and went outside.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
true
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Hello! :wave:

I have used the wonderful title of your piece in poem for The Title Poem project!

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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
O wow! That's really cool! Thanks!
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! Thank you for making such an awesomely usable title :D
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DemiSven Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I understand this poem so much right now I know how you feel. My mother has noticed, i'm distant and secretive and very rude towards her. I don't like being alone with her or going places with her. Its as if I have this grudge against her but the problem is I don't know what the grudge is.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, and I'm sorry that you can understand this
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EbonyWolf10 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I needed to comment on this, it's so accuratly true to a lot of people. This is beautifuly written, very pretty.
Umm on the second stanza though, I think you could put (For the last line)

I stare my pain in the face
Let it rip me apart
Show what I've always fear (or what I've had to fear)
In the depths of my cold heart.

That way the rhyme is influence a bit more.
Besides that, this is wonderful...
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I love the suggestion!
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:iconblue-eyed-girl-23:
Blue-eyed-girl-23 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this explains exactly what i'm going through right now beautiful poem
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And I'm sorry you know this pain.
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:iconblue-eyed-girl-23:
Blue-eyed-girl-23 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you are very welcome dear and its ok
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clarissabelle Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will warm you... :iconifyouknowhatimeanplz:
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll get the penguin blanket ;)
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clarissabelle Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconnomemeplz: it's mine. I will rape you. :iconpedobearplz:
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, very pretty. I can actually relate to you, which makes the poem all the more beautiful to me.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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X-Italy-Fan-X Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I really appreciate it =)
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