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Today I met a girl,
and she asked, "How are you?"
"Just fine," I replied.
She said, "No, tell me what's true."

Perplexed, I stopped and stared.
She was young, no older than eight.
Her eyes were still innocent.
They knew no hate.

"What did you say?"
I asked in confusion.
"You know what I mean," she said.
This girl was in a delusion.

Trying to be kind,I replied,
"No I do not."
She frowned and replied,
"You lie quite a lot."

Now I was agitated.
What does this girl know?
Acting like she's so intelligent.
I'll just tell her to go.

"Let me explain!"
She exclaimed in haste.
"I know you're not alright.
I know you feel misplaced."

What?
How in the world?
What's happening?
Who is this little girl?

"But I'm here to say you'll be alright.
Though your friends will leave,
leave you feeling alone and cold,
you'll find a reprieve."

"So just stay strong
because I know you can do it."
How? Who are you?
I wished she would quit.

Suddenly it was silent,
and I turned to see,
but there was no one there at all,
just the air and me.

Who was talking?
Was it all in my mind?
Yes, I know it was.
My own subconscious sending a sign.

For now that she's gone,
it's very plain to see.
That pretty little girl,
was the hopeful version of me.
I wrote this a few minutes ago. I'm not really sure where the inspiration came from, the last few lines just found themselves in my head and I started writing. I kinda like it, though the rhyme scheme is funny. It's okay-ish.
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Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Wow~

You are very awesome at writing~!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =)
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:iconnightcoregirl101:
Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Your welcome~!
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SmileAtYourOwnRisk Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Damn I could learn a thing or two from you. This is awesome!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =)
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SmileAtYourOwnRisk Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Anytime hon. ^^
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emmabeirsack Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Gr8
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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emmabeirsack Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
no problemo
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GrantHillsdale Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
I like the above poem. Powerful stuff.
I'm looking to collaborate with some writers in my art. It seems to me that your writing stands out and is quite graphic. I would basically follow a "script" maybe 5 pages, that you lay out. Poems or a story. Check out my stuff and let me know if this is of interest to you.
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