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Today I met a girl,
and she asked, "How are you?"
"Just fine," I replied.
She said, "No, tell me what's true."

Perplexed, I stopped and stared.
She was young, no older than eight.
Her eyes were still innocent.
They knew no hate.

"What did you say?"
I asked in confusion.
"You know what I mean," she said.
This girl was in a delusion.

Trying to be kind,I replied,
"No I do not."
She frowned and replied,
"You lie quite a lot."

Now I was agitated.
What does this girl know?
Acting like she's so intelligent.
I'll just tell her to go.

"Let me explain!"
She exclaimed in haste.
"I know you're not alright.
I know you feel misplaced."

What?
How in the world?
What's happening?
Who is this little girl?

"But I'm here to say you'll be alright.
Though your friends will leave,
leave you feeling alone and cold,
you'll find a reprieve."

"So just stay strong
because I know you can do it."
How? Who are you?
I wished she would quit.

Suddenly it was silent,
and I turned to see,
but there was no one there at all,
just the air and me.

Who was talking?
Was it all in my mind?
Yes, I know it was.
My own subconscious sending a sign.

For now that she's gone,
it's very plain to see.
That pretty little girl,
was the hopeful version of me.
I wrote this a few minutes ago. I'm not really sure where the inspiration came from, the last few lines just found themselves in my head and I started writing. I kinda like it, though the rhyme scheme is funny. It's okay-ish.
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MissMadne Featured By Owner May 2, 2015
This is amazing! I like so much! :3
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Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Wow~

You are very awesome at writing~!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =)
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:iconnightcoregirl101:
Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Your welcome~!
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SmileAtYourOwnRisk Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Damn I could learn a thing or two from you. This is awesome!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =)
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SmileAtYourOwnRisk Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Anytime hon. ^^
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emmabeirsack Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Gr8
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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:iconemmabeirsack:
emmabeirsack Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
no problemo
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GrantHillsdale Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
I like the above poem. Powerful stuff.
I'm looking to collaborate with some writers in my art. It seems to me that your writing stands out and is quite graphic. I would basically follow a "script" maybe 5 pages, that you lay out. Poems or a story. Check out my stuff and let me know if this is of interest to you.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ummm, sure, that sounds really interesting =)
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GrantHillsdale Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Maybe I could start with a short poem and draw something that fits the story. Or if you have something specific... I did a comic a while back where the writer spelled out the scene in detail. But it took me many weeks to finish...
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I Need SOme More Info
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AnythingBtOrdinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is exactly how I view you and your writing. You are the voice for those who haven't the strength to speak for themselves.:)
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you, Im glad I give people things that they can relate to
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:iconbatgirl2013:
Batgirl2013 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
I love the rhyme scheme! Only you know yourself it's true
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you =)
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InGodzHandz Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional Photographer
:)
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stayonstraintrack Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I liked it :)It was innocent but laced with truth
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you =)
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013   Writer
I'm glad that you can see that you still have a hopeful version.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
me too, I'm glad I'm not totally gone.
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:iconmagicaljoey:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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Miuru-chan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
I like this VERY much!!! This poem have so good rhythm in it. :nuu:
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!!
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:iconmiuru-chan:
Miuru-chan Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
You are welcome~!
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg! Most popular last 24 hours!! Thanks guys!!
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ryunanara Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
♥ Yes. I teared up a bit. ♥
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww, thanks i guess
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Warrior-Roseheart Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
This was so sweet! Loved it! :iconluvluvplz:
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww, thank you!
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Mariaactually Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
that was beautiful :heart:
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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BritLawrence Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
beautiful
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
why thank you very much =)
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chainedheart977 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
Love it ( I don't rhyme in my poetry to me it's all about timeing, if your going to do something short and I do mean short then it would be best to rhyme too)
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks =)
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Blue-eyed-girl-23 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wonderful
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Blue-eyed-girl-23 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
anytime ^^
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Lynn-10397 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
That was amazing! I didn't want it to end! And despite the title I so didn't see the end coming, I thought she was an angel or something. You are a really good poet, I really like your style. :)
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very very much. I need that every now and then =)
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Zebucompany Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
I liked it. And somehow still didn't see the end coming despite reading the title....I must be tired.
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol, thank you
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:iconclarissabelle:
clarissabelle Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I won't leave you...I'll never leave :iconpedobearplz:
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:iconlostmyslef:
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wouldn't want you to ;)
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clarissabelle Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol. Other people on dA probably think we are a couple of creepy lesbian lovers. We are so screwed up.
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I always have that problem of "I know 2-6 lines that I KNOW I want, but where to go from there."
If all I ever did was just post poem prompts, I think I'd be in heaven =P...
Amazing poem, especially how well you put across the point without really saying it outright until the end. =)
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lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much =)
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