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I'm getting weak,
can't find the light.
Too tired to try,
Too tired to fight.

I want to give in,
let my grip slip,
start the fall,
let myself trip.

But I can't let go.
I need to stay here.
Despite all the hardships,
despite all my fear.

I'll keep going.
I won't give in.
Though I feel like dying,
though my chances are grim.

So say hello to me,
this act I put on,
till my time comes,
till God says I'm done.
This is an awful poem I wrote today at school, it's awful, but I felt terrible about not submitting any deviations today, so here you go!
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Riassasin Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I love this poem It does feel as if everyone has gone through something like this and they either give in or don't beautiful work
RaphAndRoll Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This stuff always gives me new hope. Don't ever stop writing, you are made of pure talent
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the complement. You just gave me hope
RaphAndRoll Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What's not to compliment? You have a very special passion for putting feelings into words. And in a very beautiful, poetic way at that.Nod 
AnythingBtOrdinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nothing you write is awful. It ALL has a purpose. If one person doesn't like it...who cares. Your writing may one day give someone the strength to continue on with life (or maybe it already has). I love the child-like feel that your writing seems to always have. It has a child-like innocence (in a kid's mind sometimes where they are in life seems like its too hard, when looking back its really not) but without the selfish brattyness of today's youth. And no I'm not saying that all of today's youth is bratty, but it certainly feels like it.
lostmyslef Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you seem to like my writing so much, and it warms my heart to know that it could help people
RenosGirl77 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This's really, really good!! :) It really imparts a message of hope - so long as you never give up, things will always get better.

"Please don't give up. Because there might be someone out there only *you* can help, only *you* can save. Don't take the chance of letting them down." :)
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks sosososo much!!
RenosGirl77 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!! :) Just what I believe.
Miuru-chan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
I know that feeling... I don't have that feeling very often, but I know how it feels. It's good that you won't give up! (:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
It's not awful, it brings across a message of hope, that you won't give up despite badly wanting to.
lostmyslef Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, but i really don't think it's all that good
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